Kelsey's Scary Story

Hi! I'm struggling here with my Halloweensie revisions for Susanna Hill's annual contest, so I asked my 5 year old to help. I gave her the rules: 100 words, use pumpkin, broomstick and creak.

Well, she really showed me up writing and illustrating a fabulously scary story in about 20 minutes.

It all started with this:
(OMG! The door just creaked. What is going to be behind that door!! p.s. Note the strategically placed pumpkin and broomstick, um, because they disappear...)





(Oh the tension!!)

(AGH!!! It's a ghost!)

 "Are you nice?"
"Well, my name is Friendy, so yeah." 
"What are you doing here?"
"I'm getting ready to play with my new best friend!"   
 "Who?"
"You!"


THE END

Wow! Look how easy that is! Tension! Complex emotion! Fully fleshed characters! All in 38 words. And I thought this was hard:)  Happy Halloween!

PS. OH NO! I am a failure of a mother. I gave the dear LAST YEAR'S CONTEST WORDS!! Mulligan.

Comments

  1. Julie Rowan-ZochOctober 30, 2015 at 2:23 PM

    Love this!

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    1. Lauri MeyersOctober 31, 2015 at 7:31 AM

      Wow, Julie, Kelsey says she must be famous now! Ha:)

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  2. JEN GarrettOctober 30, 2015 at 3:05 PM

    Future Picture Book writer, right there. :)

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  3. Cathy Ballou MealeyOctober 30, 2015 at 3:26 PM

    Oh Kelsey this is GREAT! I love how the text went from creak to CREAK! And I want to meet Friendy. :-)

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    1. Lauri MeyersOctober 31, 2015 at 7:33 AM

      I was dying. I thought she was just stuck for awhile because she kept drawing the same picture. Then I realized CREAK was growing...and the door was opening...and I almost had a heart attack from the suspense!

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  4. Romelle BroasOctober 30, 2015 at 4:46 PM

    Wow. Suspense, tension, and a surprise ending! Terrific job, Kelsey! 5 stars for Kelsey's Scary Story!

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  5. Gregory E BrayOctober 30, 2015 at 4:47 PM

    This is great!

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    1. Lauri MeyersOctober 31, 2015 at 7:31 AM

      Kelsey says Thank you. (very quietly and shyly from under the table:)

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  6. Penny Parker KlostermannOctober 30, 2015 at 8:35 PM

    So cute! Tell Kelsey she's quite a writer!

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    1. Lauri MeyersOctober 31, 2015 at 7:30 AM

      She is so proud. She just read it to Daddy over bacon.

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  7. Susanna Leonard HillOctober 31, 2015 at 8:00 PM

    Fabulous, Lauri! I can see Kelsey has a writing and illustrating career ahead! Now, if her mother could just give her the right words... just kidding :) Love her wonderful drawings and Friendly the ghost :)

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  8. AnonymousNovember 1, 2015 at 12:53 PM

    So adorable! I especially love, "Well, my name is Friendy, so yeah."

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  9. Charlotte DixonNovember 1, 2015 at 12:59 PM

    Love this-Kelsey is on her way to writing and illustrating :) Good luck!

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